Incorrectly Placing Adverbs
On my last 3 posts, I showed how messy my Grammar is by Grammarly’s standards.
Contextual Spelling: 349
Grammer: 212
Punctuation: 999+ (Um that’s embarrassing)
Sentence Structure: 19
Style: 127
Vocabulary Enhancement: 267
Here are some common sentence structure problems found. If you missed a previous post you can click on the crossed out links here.
Incorrect word order .
Missing Verb .
Squinting Modifier .
Incorrect Adverb Placement
Missing _____ in emphatic sentence
Incorrect Adverb Placement.
Oops, this only happened once in my draft. I know I’m not the only person in the world to do this so I won’t bother myself with being too embarrassed.
I’ll start with a refresher and elaborate on what an adverb is.
- Anne speaks softly.
- Afterwards, she danced with Tony.
- Anne shops locally.
These sentences can work without the adverb in red, but they are better with a modifier that gives the verb a who, what, where, how description. Sure Anne shops. But to say shes shops locally gives her shopping more value.
Adjectives can also be modified by adverbs. However, most adjectives fall into the filter word category and are ‘boring’ here are some examples of adjectives and how I would fix them further
The verb in the sentence is meowed.
The cat meowed.
How did the cat meow? Add an adverb to the verb
The cat meowed loudly.
To give a ‘when’ to the sentence add another adverb…
Yesterday, The cat meowed loudly.
To add depth to the cat, add an adjective
Yesterday, The white cat meowed loudly.
White is boring, let’s beef it up. Now to add an adverb to modify the adjective
Yesterday, The soft white cat meowed loudly.
Last but not least to add an adverb modifying the adverb. This is a filter word and I would normally leave it out.
Yesterday, The soft white cat meowed very loudly.
I only had one Incorrect adverb placement from my book. Placing them incorrectly seems to be a typo or me just writing too fast. I would catch this on my “ing” search-and-destroy edit.
This one is an easy fix by simply reversing ringing repeatedly to repeatedly ringing. Now on a side note ringing is “ing-ing” and I would probably rewrite the sentence. Also, I could hear is more of a tell, not show.
I would rewrite this to:
The simple word justice repeatedly rang in my ears.
Or
The word justice repeatedly rang in my ears.
My advice about Incorrect adverb placement:
These are pretty easy to find if you read the sentence aloud or have someone else read it. They chop up the sentence or make them awkward to read. I still recommend having a professional or a program to help find them. The ones that are built into word processors are usually not enough.
-Sheryl
Copyright © 2018 All rights reserved
Loved your examples, Sheryl. Since I’ve been reading your suggestions, I’ve noticed little things that require changing that made a difference and I’m ever grateful your here. 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
You’re super welcome, I’m glad it helps even if it’s a little.
LikeLike
In my case, a little went a long way, as I learned mistakes I’d been making forever and those little changes made a huge difference to the feel of the story.😁
LikeLiked by 1 person
That’s wonderful to hear. I’m glad my mistakes helped with yours.
LikeLike
lmao, yep that’s the ticket! roflmao Seriously though, I follow and learn 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
I have no idea what you said here but I love that you said it. I especially love the color coding. I’m starting to question you writing now. I write like taking dictation so it moves as if someone was talking and I was doing it shorthand—not actual shorthand. I get upset when the story moves faster than I write. But this is a good thing to read. It helps a lot with invented languages. ☺️
LikeLiked by 1 person
Sometimes I have to stop typing story to play a scene out in my head and I look and see I’ve typed crazy bits and pieces. I’ll even stop what I’m writing to type a line or two in advance then pick back up. It’s weird, but sometimes an idea or a line pops in before the story gets there, but I’m afraid I’ll forget if I don’t jot it down immediately. I just finished writing a high-action final arc scene and I looked back it was/is a mess! I skipped all kinds of details just to get the images+dialogue in my head on the page in word. I can’t wait to see how many errors Grammarly scolds me for in that one.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Pingback: Do Write An Emphatic Sentence – Sentence Structure#5 | I wrote a book. Now what?
THANKS SO MUCH…A GREAT HELP!!!! 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks for stopping by, thanks for the compliment.
Cheers.
LikeLike
Pingback: Grammarly looks interesting – Webbplatstitel