Been-sprouts

Been-sprouts

I’ve recently read a story that was littered with the word been.

While it is a useful verb, it can be tiresome to read it over and over to the point, it becomes aggravating.

The word, been, sprouts up in my past-tense writing a lot. After it annoyed me in someone else’s writing, I went to look again. I had 106 incidences of it in a 110k manuscript. Not bad, but not good. I looked back to see what it was from my first draft, and I had 214 incidences of BEEN.

That means it’s an overused word or crutch-word. Something I lean on too much, and I consider that to be lazy writing. I can do better.

Here are some examples from my writing of where I plunked the word been in and how I removed it. The final sentence used is shown in blue.

I’ve never been on a dock in my life.
I’ve never stepped foot on a dock in my life.

You’ve been betrayed.
You were betrayed.
They betrayed you.

It had been the first time I was allowed out past dark.
It was the first time I was allowed out past dark.
(Now I have two ‘was’ in the sentence.)
I was allowed out past dark for the first time.
(Sometimes a complete rewrite of the sentence is the solution.)

He had been his own lawyer.
He was his own lawyer.
He’d acted as his own lawyer. 

I’d been so upset. I sputtered my answer like an idiot.
I was so upset. I sputtered my answer like an idiot.
Upset, I sputtered my answer like an idiot.

“You could have been smarter about that.”
(Sometimes I’ll leave it in dialogue if it works for the character.)
“I’ve been driving for hours!”

While I do my best not to overuse BEEN, I don’t eliminate it completely. I’m happy with less than 50 incidences of the word in a 110k word document. Most had sprouted up in dialogue, the others felt necessary—to keep the tone of the situation/sentence intact.

 

 

 

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Six Word Story Challenge – Treason

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Six Word Story Challenge

Here is this week’s six-word story challenge. This prompt is now hosted by Wonderwall360 and Kirstwrites. Once a week they post a one-word prompt, and we get to create a six-word story in response. At the end of the week, there is a Poll for everyone to vote for their favorite story and the winners get a badge. Even if you don’t participate in the prompt, you can still vote for your top three picks at the end of the week.

The prompt this week is:

Treason

What six words would you use to tell a story about the prompt?

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My story:

“His arrow missed his corrupt King.

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Six Word Story Challenge – HISTORY

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Six Word Story Challenge

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The prompt this week is:

History

What six words would you use to tell a story about the word Grandmother?

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My story:

“Document our victory.

Whitewash it?

Unquestionably.”

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Six Word Story Challenge – Grandmother

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Six Word Story Challenge

Here is this week’s six-word story challenge. This prompt is now hosted by Wonderwall360 and Kirstwrites. Once a week they post a one-word prompt, and we get to create a six-word story in response. At the end of the week, there is a Poll for everyone to vote for their favorite story and the winners get a badge. Even if you don’t participate in the prompt, you can still vote for your top three picks at the end of the week.

The prompt this week is:

Grandmother

What six words would you use to tell a story about the word Grandmother?

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My story:

“Daughters’ adopted baby is loved unconditionally. ”

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Six Word Story Challenge – Superstition

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Here is this week’s six-word story challenge. This prompt is now hosted by Wonderwall360 and Kirstwrites. Once a week they post a one-word prompt, and we get to create a six-word story in response. At the end of the week, there is a Poll for everyone to vote for their favorite story and the winners get a badge. Even if you don’t participate in the prompt, you can still vote for your top three picks at the end of the week.

The prompt this week is:

Superstition

What six words would you use to tell a story about the word Superstition? Silly or SCARY, superstitions are a global phenomenon.

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My story:

“Fate unveiled; Old Wives told true. ”

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Six Word Story Challenge – Princess

Six Word Story Challenge

Here is this week’s six-word story challenge. This prompt is now hosted by Wonderwall360 and Kirstwrites. Once a week they post a one-word prompt, and we get to create a six-word story in response. At the end of the week, there is a Poll for everyone to vote for their favorite story and the winners get a badge. Even if you don’t participate in the prompt, you can still vote for your top three picks at the end of the week.

The prompt this week is:

Princess

What six words would you use to tell a story about the word Princess?

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My story:

“Tiara by day; cowl by night.”

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Six Word Story Challenge – Game

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The prompt this week is:

GAME

What six words would you use to tell a story about the word Game?

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My story:

“The hunt’s on; we eat tonight.”

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Six Word Story Challenge – Circus

Six Word Story Challenge

Here is this week’s six-word story challenge. This prompt is now hosted by Wonderwall360 and Kirstwrites. Once a week they post a one-word prompt, and we get to create a six-word story in response. At the end of the week, there is a Poll for everyone to vote for their favorite story and the winners get a badge. Even if you don’t participate in the prompt, you can still vote for your top three picks at the end of the week.

The prompt this week is:

CIRCUS

What six words would you use to tell a story about the word Circus?

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My story:

“Couldn’t train animals; trained humans instead.”

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Six Word Story Challenge – Friendship

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The prompt this week is:

Friendship

What six words would you use to tell a story about the word Friendship?

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My story:

“The dog licked his boy’s hand.”

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Six Word Story Challenge – School

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The prompt this week is:

School

What six words would you use to tell a story about the word School?

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My story:

“Migrating group bedazzles the sea..”

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