Emotions are something we deal with constantly everyday. When I first started writing I told the emotions instead of showing them. ‘She was angry.’ This was lazy and hard to read. I read blogs, articles and some of the books out there such as Master lists for writers and the Emotion thesaurus. Why? Because showing emotion is a lot harder than saying it. Also because emotion generally fell within conversation and ended up at taglines. I read blogs, books and articles Learning more every time.
Here is a telling emotional conversation from my rough draft.
“Are you calling me stupid?” Erin said angrily.
Sam was glad the beds were between them and felt brave for some strange reason.
“No, but you’re acting it.” Sam said forcefully. She did not want to do this, but she was committed and had had enough of her nasty attitude.
“Insult me again Sam and you’ll be sorry.”
“I won’t be sorry Erin, because I didn’t insult you.”
“You did!” Erin shouted angrily.
“No, I said your actions were stupid.”
“It’s the same dammed thing.” She growled.
As discussed in Tag you’re it this is a rough draft loaded with taglines and I’m telling the emotion not showing it. This is hard to read. Here is the correction.
“Are you calling me stupid?” Erin took a step forward curling her lips back.
Sam glanced down at the two beds between them. “No, but you’re acting it.” She squared her feet and locked eyes.
This was not an ideal situation. Exhaustion and stress were wearing them all down. Tolerance for Erin’s rude comments is wearing thin.
“Insult me again and you’ll be sorry.”
“I won’t be sorry, because I didn’t insult you.” Sam took a deep breath exhaling slowly.
“You did!”
“No Erin. I said your actions were stupid.”
“It’s the same dammed thing.” Erin clenched and shook her fist slightly.
Emotions are hard to show, the key is to take a moment to think about how you feel and what do you do when you are excited? Do you jump up and down clapping your hands melodramatically? Does everyone? Not likely. There are those that do, but usually its things such as grinning, smiling, whooping, punching the air or clenching fists under the chin and hunching your shoulders. Everyone reacts differently and it’s important that your characters do too. Sam stays calm and defensive. Erin is prone to aggression and rage. However when Sam gets upset she reacts by walking away or pursing her lips while Erin would insult or lash out. Someone else might strike out physically without provocation.
My advice about emotions.
Like actions, they need to be shown not told. Watch others, ask others how they react to emotions. If you’re stumped try a resource, there are some great books out there that have better ideas.
While tricky, showing emotion draws the reader in and creates empathy. People read to experience a story so give them one to dive into.
-Sheryl
More about taglines
Tag! You’re it.
My thoughts on Filter words
No “Filter Word” Parking Here
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*Smiling* Am I? Said the reader… Oh no I made use of a tagline
Oopps.. It’s cool sheryl
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haha funny guy. They aren’t taboo just less is more. 😉
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At the article
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Sheryl,
I can’t find your follow button, would you add one ? “frustrated” reader ..
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Sorry, I’m working on it now.
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it is under widgets
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Let me know if that is better. Thanks for pointing out that it was missing.
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looks big and blue now .. thanks … 151 followers, “not bad”said with a wink and a smile.
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Cheeky. Thanks again iwillfightsite. I’m new at this.
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I Absolutely LOVE the Emotion Thesaurus and use it a Ridiculous amount of the time. 😮
By the way, thank you for the new story idea…
“It’s the same Dammed thing”
I think that will be my new flash fiction prompt. 😀
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I’m glad you liked it.
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I LOVE THIS! Writing a book is next on my agenda, blogging was the first step. Thanks for this FABULOUS info, it was a LEARNING experience for me!
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I’m glad you’re finding my information fabulous. All my posts touch on an aspect of what I’ve learned as a novice writer. Let me know if you have any questions.
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I will! I forwarded your post to my email so I could read again after work. I want to write and upload it to Amazon. I was told in Life Coach school that a book was a faster way to get my name out there.
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Before you upload your book you should do some research regarding publishing. Don’t be hasty take your time to do it right. Do you want your name out there fast and forgotten? Or in due time, respected and remembered forever?
I have posted a few about publishing and what it entails.
I’m not a professional, but if you have questions I’m happy to share what I’ve learned.
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Thanks! I won’t start it until next year. Have to get the business up and running first. Is your email on your blog? I’d love to stay connected.
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It’s in my “Say Hello” link.
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Reblogged this on juantetcts and commented:
As writing a book is the next major goal on my list, I found this post both informative and inspirational!
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Emotion thesaurus, who knew! I could have used one of those just to walk through life in journey! Is it online or something I can purchase?
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You can buy it online or in a bookstore they have a bunch, I bought the kobo download for my reader. The emotion thesaurus they also have, urban setting, negative trait and more. Author is Angela Ackerman.
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This is a really great tip for writing, and to be honest, one I had never thought of. Yes showing emotions, engages the reader more than merely writing them all down; and when we know the certain actions they take when they feel a specific sentiment it’s amazing because you know you have developed a relationship with the character. Great post 🙂 !
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Thanks for reading my post, it was something I didn’t know at first either.
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